Peer Responses

Peer Response Week 1:

Zaavan: I find this writing to be fascinating and I can relate in a way. I cheered most of my life and my coaches also did not see me be someone with potential. I can relate to the feeling and it is not one of the best, but it makes you work harder. Since you are now one of the fastest athletes in the county I can see the hard work paid off! What kind of training did you do to help push you to enjoy running? I am not the best running; I never liked it. I was always slow, and I always got out of breath right away. It would be interesting to hear you share some techniques that brought you to be as passionate about running as you are today. Also, I agree with that because you don’t run as much anymore doesn’t mean you aren’t a runner. While busy with school I can see how running can slip from your routine. Do you think running will be a routine in your life at some point again? If the investment is worth it, it will be interesting to read more about how you pick up the habit of running again and how you got back on track with running.

Carly: I can relate to this because I am very quiet. I do realize being quiet you hear more conversations and some people can be rude with what they say behind other people’s backs. Have people ever talked about your friends behind their backs? Have you had any bad situations with overhearing a conversation? Technology today interferes with honest communication today. I always see people on their phones while other people are trying to talk to them and it looks very rude. People have even done it to me, and it hurts my feelings whenever it happens. As well as that, I can agree with thoughts getting dull. I tend to share the same stories with my friends because I am always thinking the same thoughts. As well as I want to tell people stories, but they aren’t interested. It always feels good to find that person who will listen. Some people are rude, but there are still people in this world who will be interested and give the respect a person wants. Since you are a good listener, it can help you help out your friends or at times, listening can be used in a job. Quiet people may have trouble in interviews, but there are jobs out there that are right for them.

Peer Response Week 2:

Gia: For being at Drexel for a few months, I haven't met too many commuters. It is interesting to hear about people commuting and their aspect on it. I agree with your reasoning to commute, housing can be expensive, and if you live close to the school, a lot of money would be saved. I live close to Drexel, but not close enough to commute. Which form of transportation is easiest to take to school for you? I must agree that welcome week was hectic trying to meet people, but it is good you got to meet just a few individuals. Even though you haven't seen them yet, there are chances you could see them more throughout your experience at Drexel. But finding a group of business commuters is very good because you guys can all relate. Together, you guys can feel less like outsiders. You guys can help each other out and hangout between classes as you explained. The cons seem very annoying I must admit; I would not enjoy waiting around all day either. But each day you could bring a new book to read or a new movie to watch. Occupying yourself could be the key to the cons.

Carly: I've worked a job before with people I did not feel comfortable with. Being young and working with the elderly who would trade inappropriate stories is never a good experience. It wasn't fun, and that is why I cut my one job short as well. But your experience does not sound good, and it is good you cut your job short the last year. Being treated unfairly just because of your gender is never appropriate for your boss to give. The farmer shouldn't switch your tasks just because the new workers are male. There are some jobs where boss' treat their workers unfair based on qualities a person cannot change. That is a sign that a person should find a new job. I am sure there is another job out there where your boss will treat you well, and you will be given the tasks you can do and aren't the average "woman" job. 

Peer Response Week 3:

Abigail: Four and five are very helpful hints. The tips teach you how to be short and to the point and to not over explain. I also have a problem with over explaining and it helps that the article can teach us not to. The " save the controversial questions until the end of the conversation" tip is very helpful. As you explained, it does help the interviewer to develop a relationship with the interviewee. Developing a relationship is important because it allows the interviewee to feel comfortable answering questions or not wanting to respond to some questions in case the questions get too intense. I really like your questions that you created. They are worded very well, and it is clear that you used the hints to help create them! Each question is very clear and well written. There is nothing you should change!

Alexis: Tip #11 is helpful, yet it surprised me. I would always think to use a more positive approach rather than a negative one, but I see where the author is coming from by using a negative one. I agree with what you said about the honesty. This can give people a chance to give more of an honest answer.  Tip #19 is surprising, but I see where the author is coming from. The interviewer may know more than the interviewee, but the interviewer might make the interviewee feel intimidated by them showing off their knowledge. This could lead to the interviewee being scared to answer questions and not giving a full answer. All your questions are very well worded! A few of them are yes/no questions so those are the ones I think you should switch up. You could keep the question but ask "why do you think that?" after the question is stated. Other than that, I think you did an excellent job creating questions.

Peer Response Week 4:

Katrina: Your sources seem very reliable. I like how you explained each article because that is a way you can remember which information each article has. I may borrow this technique when I try to fix up my annotated bibliography! The information you found so far is very good and goes well with your topic. Maybe try finding one or two more pieces from each source and try taking a little bit from each source. Also adding some quotes would be very helpful for your paper! Your topic seems very interesting. There are defiantly more sources that have done resource on twins so I'm sure your annotated bibliography will keep getting bigger and bigger throughout your process of preparing to write! I am excited to read your paper and learn more about the behavior of twins.

Rhea: You have amazing sources! After reading the information you got from each source, I realized how well they go with your topic! You did great finding your sources. Try to add my information from the first and third source. Also, attempt to find short and straightforward information that you can put on your paper at times! Your topic is a great topic and the information you have supports your identity. It is great that you have statistics as one of your quotes. This way you can add some logos into your paper. The other sources show strong ethos. It displays the emotion of your identity and how other people with the same identity feel. I see pathos being used at times, but try to find another direct quote. Overall, you did amazing with the annotated bibliography, and the research you found was excellent! Your paper is going to be very interesting, and I can't wait to read it.

Peer Response Week 5: Finish rough draft of paper.

Peer Response Week 6:

Armin: Your prompt had a lot of incredible detail. You described the event very well; I even felt like I was there when it was happening. You should think about including this story in your paper so your readers can experience this moment and get a good idea of how it feels to have your identity. I like how you let the reader guess what happens after a few of the sections. It makes the reader want to keep reading to find out what will happen next. Going through injuries can be the worst, this prompt catches how much it affects not just your sport, but your life. Planning exercises and more can be challenging when you have to work it around your everyday life. The reader can feel the pain you have to go through just to play the sport you love. Overall, I think you did a fantastic job capturing the moment and how you feel about your identity.

Carly: First off, I love how you titled your prompt. It makes me question what your prompt will be about. You used a lot of great detail to describe the one particular day. I have never worked on a farm, so I couldn't imagine what it would be like. With many details, you used, it makes me feel like I'm on the farm with you completing those tasks. This prompt gives me a good idea of how it feels like to have your identity. The days seem hard, you must be exhausted by the end. With the amount of information that is included in your prompt, you should put this story in your paper. It gives the reader an excellent idea of what it is like to work on the farm on a not so good of a day.

Peer Response Week 7:

Armin: The introduction to your paragraph was very well written. It grabs the reader’s attention, and I get an idea of your average day. Your days seem very long and tiring, it makes me feel bad and brings up questions about your identity. Is being a college athlete worth the tiring days? Even though there are cons, what are the biggest pros? As I keep reading, I hope to find out a few answers. In the second paragraph, you mention what people think of student athletes. It would be a good idea to show some examples or situations where people see athletes get a helping hand in classes. Some examples you could use would be from movies, books, or a real life situation if it has ever occurred.

The interview you included was very well. It is good you have someone in the same situation as you to share their experience.  Even though you were able to find someone to interview, you should include more of the interview in your essay. Since your person is in the same situation as you at the same school, it would be interesting to hear how they think of their identity and if they agree/disagree with your views.  Also to add more to your interview, you could interview someone from a different school who is also a college athlete or someone else from Drexel who is a college athlete but plays a different sport. Hearing from various people with the same identity with some twists would be interesting to hear about.

The last paragraph of research is very well written. You were able to show research and show that college athletes do not receive special treatment. Some things to work on though are introducing your sources. Also, adding some more research would help.

Overall, I think your essay is very well written. You have done a great job so far. Adding a few things would help it and make it even better.

Peer Response Week 8:

Ryan: The new information you added so far is great. These will make great additions to your essay. It is interesting to hear about how you read people. It is even more interesting to hear that you aren't the only one to do so. Hearing that a reliable source is in the same situation as you are very good. Also, what do you read about people? What are some things you read about people? It will be interesting to hear about what you read and how. Also, since you interviewed your brother, see if he reads people as well as you do. It is always good to have a second interviewee and to have your brother be one is great. He is going through the same situation with the same people, so it is interesting to hear from his point of view and if you guys are thinking the same things about the same situation. People handle situations differently, hearing the situation from your brother's point of view would be great to hear. I can't wait to hear more about your essay and see the finished product.

Carly: The information you found was great. It is great to inform readers, like myself, who don't know much about farms. It gives us an idea of what you are talking about before you share your personal narrative. The information you found was worded very well and easy to understand. It was very good background information. As I moved on to reading, I enjoyed reading the personal narrative part. You write details very well. As I read the personal narrative, I feel as if I am experiencing that moment. It is like a short movie in my head. I can see what is going on and start to understand your identity. I have not grown up on a farm, so I don't know what it is like. After reading what you wrote, I begin to get an idea. You work so hard to do your job, and I applaud you to that. I can't wait to read the rest of your essay and learn more about what it is like to grow up on a farm.